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The pie charts give information about the water used for residential, industrial and agricultural purposes in San Diego County, California, and the world as a whole.

The pie charts give information about the water used for residential, industrial and agricultural purposes in San Diego County, California, and the world as a whole. 7JJ0k
The given pie charts illustrate the consumption of water for the purpose of residential, industry and agriculture in the various cities, namely San Diego County, California and the world as a whole. Overall, it can be seen that the maximum proportion of water was used for the home purpose in the city of San Diego and California. By contrast, in the world maximum water was used for farming purpose. In San Diego County and California, the maximum proportion of water is used for the home usage accounting for 60% and 39% respectively. However, the use of water for agriculture was significantly low, at 17% and 28% of the total uptake. On the other hand, only 8% of the water is used for the home uptake, whereas a massive 69% is required for the use in agriculture. The consumption of water is observed as 23% for industrial purpose in San Diego County and worldwide, but its usability in California exceeded both cities by 10%.
The
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for the purpose of residential, industry and agriculture in the various cities,
namely
San Diego County, California and the world as a whole.

Overall
, it can be
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seen
that the maximum proportion of
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was
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used
for the home purpose in the city of San Diego and California. By contrast, in the world maximum
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water
was
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used
for farming purpose.

In San Diego County and California, the maximum proportion of
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water
is
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used
for the home usage accounting for 60% and 39%
respectively
.
However
, the
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use
of
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water
for agriculture was
significantly
low, at 17% and 28% of the total uptake.

On the other hand
,
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only
8% of the
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water
is
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used
for the home uptake, whereas a massive 69%
is required
for the
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use
in agriculture. The consumption of
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water
is observed
as 23% for industrial purpose in San Diego County and worldwide,
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its usability in California exceeded both cities by 10%.
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IELTS academic The pie charts give information about the water used for residential, industrial and agricultural purposes in San Diego County, California, and the world as a whole.

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