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The line graph below shows the the data of people that they had access to clean water in the year 2004.

The line graph below shows the the data of people that they had access to clean water in the year 2004. nRRxg
In the UN Human Development Report 2006, the given bar chart compares four different (various) regions in the world in terms of the data of people that they have access to clean water in the year 2004, with unit measured in percentage Overall, the percentage of people who the access to clean water in Latin America was significantly higher than those in the other three items, namely the Middle East, South Asia and Saharan Africa. It is evident that, among four regions, the proportion of people in Latin America was the largest part of the access to clean water, reaching a peak at 90 percentage, flow by Middle East ranked second place, with about 86 percentage on this. Turning to South Asia, the amount of people who used clean water was third place, this was slightly lower than Latin America region, with roughly 84 percentage. On the other hand, Saharan Africa accounted for the lowest amount among all part of the access to clean water, at roughly 55 percentage.
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in the year 2004, with unit measured in percentage

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in Latin America was the largest part of the
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, reaching a peak at 90
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, flow
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ranked second place, with about 86
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was third place, this was
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IELTS academic The line graph below shows the the data of people that they had access to clean water in the year 2004.

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