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The pie charts below compare how the expenditure and population worldwide allocated and the consumption

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The pie charts below compare how the expenditure and population worldwide allocated and the consumption of resources in 2 distinct areas. Can be seen from the charts that food takes a lead in the world spending. While the population in the world allocated most in Asia, USA & Europe are higher in consumption of resources than the rest of the world. Food dominates in the world expenditure with 24%, higher than the data of transportation with 18%. The percentage of housing money allocation is 12%, a double of that of clothing with 6%. The rest is used for other demands. With regards to Europe and Americas, although they share a small percentage and together contribute to just nearly one-third of the world population, their consumption of resources is much as 60%, overwhelming the use in the remaining world (40%). Besides, Asis accommodates foor more than a half of world population, as opposed to only one-ten of Africa.
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spending. While the
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in the
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allocated most in Asia, USA & Europe are higher in consumption of resources than the rest of the world.

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expenditure with 24%, higher than the data of transportation with 18%. The percentage of housing money allocation is 12%, a double of that of clothing with 6%. The rest is
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