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The pie charts compare the proportion of time which senior people (from 60 to 70) and youngsters (from 18 to 26) spent on social network activities.

The pie charts compare the proportion of time which senior people (from 60 to 70) and youngsters (from 18 to 26) spent on social network activities. eAGdp
The pie charts compare the proportion of time which senior people (from 60 to 70) and youngsters (from 18 to 26) spent on social network activities. Overall, The most popular activity among young people was the social networking. More interestingly despite being the most common activity for adults making booking (for cinema \travel), it has the lowest level in youngsters activity. Noticeable point is that, making purchases has the same pattern on both graphs. Focusing on the first figures of the data, it is clear that social networking is the most widespread activity for youngsters and has the greatest number 24%. Downloading music\films as well as researching the information have the same proportion approximately 20%-21%. More lower figures owned by playing games 18% with making purchases 12% and the smallest number is in making booking 5%. As for the second graph, the most greatest number is on making booking (cinema\ travel) 25% and others which have the approximately same figures are social networking as well as researching data ( 21% to 22%), accessing (music\ films) with making purchases (15%-12%) and the last which has the lowest proportion is playing games 5%.
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for adults making booking (for cinema \travel), it has the lowest level in youngsters
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. Noticeable point is that, making
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has the same pattern on both graphs.

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for youngsters and has the greatest number 24%. Downloading music\films
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by playing games 18% with making
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12% and the smallest number is in making booking 5%.

As for the second graph, the
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(15%-12%) and the last which has the lowest proportion is playing games 5%.
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