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The pie charts compare the prominent reasons behind the movement of people to and from the UK in 2007.

The pie charts compare the prominent reasons behind the movement of people to and from the UK in 2007. Nl3DW
The pie charts compare the prominent reasons behind the movement of people to and from the UK in 2007. Those are composed of six main factors that lead to annual migration. Overall, it can be seen that employment was the leading cause for total migration, while education had the least number of residents emigrated from the UK. In detail, more than half of those who migrated did so for a specific job motive, accounting for 30% immigration and 29% emigration. In addition, 13% of people came to the UK in search of work, while 22% left for the same reason. There were 15 percent and 13 percent of persons came or left to accompany someone, respectively. Furthermore, more than a quarter of people went to the United Kingdom to seek formal education, whereas only 4% left for the same reason. However, 32% of people cited other or no reasons for leaving the UK, and this percentage resulted in 17% of immigration.
The pie charts compare the prominent
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behind the movement of
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to and from the UK in 2007. Those
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of six main factors that lead to annual migration.

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that employment was the leading cause for total migration, while education had the least number of residents emigrated from the UK.

In detail, more than half of those who migrated did
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for a specific job motive, accounting for 30% immigration and 29% emigration.
In addition
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people
came to the UK in search of work, while 22%
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left
for the same
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. There were 15 percent and 13 percent of persons came or
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to accompany someone,
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.

Furthermore
, more than a quarter of
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went to the United Kingdom to seek formal education, whereas
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4%
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left
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cited other or no
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for leaving the UK, and this percentage resulted in 17% of immigration.
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