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The pie charts compare the amount of time that people use the internet on two different digital devices.

The pie charts compare the amount of time that people use the internet on two different digital devices. 2alkx
The pie charts compare the amount of time that people use the internet on two different digital devices. It is noticeable that the figure for spending on the smartphone and tablet to play games are the most popular among the remaining five activities. While reading the news and using utilities are unpopular in smartphones and tablets, respectively. With regard to games, the time people using accounts for more than the third in comparison with 57% of the amount of time that people use on tablets. By contrast, people spent 29% of social networking on smartphones, 3 times more than on tablets. Similarly, the use of utilities on smartphones takes for 20%, Whereas tablets only 3%. Regarding music and video, only 8% amount of time use on smartphones and the figure for tablets record 13%. Reading news and other activities on smartphones and tablets are not popular registers 3%, 5% for smartphones, s and 3% and 8% for tablets, respectively.
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It is noticeable that the figure for spending on the smartphone and tablet to play games are the most popular among the remaining five activities. While reading the news and using utilities are unpopular in smartphones and tablets,
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on tablets. By contrast,
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on smartphones and the figure for tablets record 13%. Reading news and other activities on smartphones and tablets are not popular registers 3%, 5% for smartphones, s and 3% and 8% for tablets,
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