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The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. bqjB
The beneath charts represent amount of electricity produced by five various fuel sources in Australia as well as France varies from 1980 and 2000. As meticulously mentioned in four kinds of the charts, at the beginning of the period oil contributed least material for getting power in Australia, while coal was most significant fuel substance. In comparison, Nuclear power became largest stuff in France in one particular year. However, in another year it had taken average part. It is noticeable that, in Australia oil accounted 10% in 1980, and it suddenly fallen to lowest fraction of 2% in 2000. On contrary, Coal consists of 50% in 1980, and it gradually increased to peak point of 130% in 2000. On the other hand, in France there were drastic interchanges in these fuel stuffs. Firstly, Nuclear power reported basic 15% in 1980. However, there was the unbelievable growth approximately 126% in 2000. Moreover, Coal also took second highest position respectively in both years 1980 and 2000 equivalently. Well, as we can clearly in these charts other stuffs like Hydro power was used for electricity around 20% in 1980 in Australia. On contrast, it experienced sixteen-fold development to 36% in 2000. An Natural gas was 20% in 1980, but it remarkably fell to 2% in 2000. At the same time oil was 10% in 1980, it was also completely touched the down mark 2% in 2000. Natural gas was utilized for producing electricity by France around 25% in 1980, Oppositely, it extremely dropped to 2% in 2000. Following this same pattern Hydro power was already low fraction of 5% in 1980, and it was also shown 2% similarly nuclear power in 2000. To conclude, in Australia coal was substantial fuel for creating power. On contrast, in France nuclear power played vital and largest role in one particular year.
The beneath charts represent amount of electricity produced by five various
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fuel
sources in Australia
as well
as France varies
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from 1980 and 2000
.

As
meticulously
mentioned in four kinds of the charts, at the beginning of the period oil contributed least material for getting
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power
in Australia, while coal was
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most
significant
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fuel
substance.
In comparison
, Nuclear
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power
became
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largest
stuff in France in one particular
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year
.
However
, in another
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year
it had taken average part.

It is noticeable that, in Australia oil accounted 10% in 1980, and it
suddenly
fallen to
A determiner is probably missing here: "the lowest".
lowest
fraction of 2% in 2000. On contrary, Coal consists of 50% in 1980, and it
gradually
increased to peak point of 130% in 2000.
On the other hand
, in France there were drastic interchanges in these
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fuel
stuffs.
Firstly
, Nuclear
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power
reported basic 15% in 1980.
However
, there was the unbelievable growth approximately 126% in 2000.
Moreover
, Coal
also
took second highest position
respectively
in both years 1980 and 2000
equivalently
.

Well, as we can
clearly
in these charts other stuffs like Hydro
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power
was
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used
for electricity around 20% in 1980 in Australia. On contrast, it experienced sixteen-fold development to 36% in 2000.
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An
Natural gas was 20% in 1980,
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but
it
remarkably
fell to 2% in 2000. At the same time oil was 10% in 1980, it was
also
completely touched the down mark 2% in 2000.

Natural gas
was utilized
for producing electricity by France around 25% in 1980,
Oppositely
, it
extremely
dropped to 2% in 2000. Following this same pattern Hydro
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power
was already low fraction of 5% in 1980, and it was
also
shown 2%
similarly
nuclear
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power
in 2000.

To conclude
, in Australia coal was substantial
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fuel
for creating
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power
. On contrast, in France nuclear
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power
played vital and largest role in one particular
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year
.

IELTS academic The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.

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