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The pie charts below show the propotions of visits to Ireland last year by age group, and by gender and type of visit. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the propotions of visits to Ireland last year by age group, and by gender and type of visit. 5A02A
The first pie graph describes the percentage of age group visited Ireland and the second pie graph illustrates the number of people based on genders which were male and female and purpose of the visit there last year. To begin with, the age group of 25-34 years old and 45-54 years old accounted for 23% respectively which was the significant rate among other age groups. The group that was the next proportion was 35-44 years old by 19% and then 11% was for 55-64 years old. Young age groups from newborn babies to 24 years old visited Ireland by 6% and 9% each. In addition to this, the elderly over 66years old went there only 9% which was the same rate as the 26-24 years group. Besides, it can be seen that the percentage of leisure purpose in male and female was similar each other which were 43% and 40% respectively. 13% of men visited the country for business and women percentage was only 4% for the business trip. Overall, these graphs might say that Ireland is a place that foreign people prefer to enjoy their holiday rather than the business.
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age
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visited Ireland and the second pie graph illustrates the number of
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based on genders which were male and female and purpose of the visit there last year.

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age
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of 25-34 years
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and 45-54 years
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accounted for 23%
respectively
which was the significant rate among other
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age
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. The
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that was the
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proportion was 35-44 years
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by 19% and then 11% was for 55-64 years
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. Young
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age
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from newborn babies to 24 years
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visited Ireland by 6% and 9% each.
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to this, the elderly over 66years
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went there
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9% which was the same rate as the 26-24 years group.

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, it can be
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seen
that the percentage of leisure purpose in male and female was similar each other which were 43% and 40%
respectively
. 13% of
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men
visited the country for business and women percentage was
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4% for the business trip.

Overall
, these graphs might say that Ireland is a place that foreign
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people
prefer to enjoy their holiday
rather
than the business.
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