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The chart shows the information about in 2010 the percentage of men and women in different age group who did the regular physical activity in Australia. Male percentage higher than female at age from15 to24 who did regular physical activity in Australia which was 52. 8% and 47. 7% respectively. But it became opposite trend the age from 25 to 64. However men and women interstingly same percentage at above 64. It was around 46%. Age From 25 to 34 Female percentage almost 6% higher than male such as 42. 2%. But this percentage slightly lower at age from 35 to 44. In contrast female percentage higher in that age which was 39. 5% and 52. 2% respectively. the percentage of male and female Physical activity did at age from 45 to 54 In Australia female almost 10% higher than male. This age group female had 53. 3%. But It was only 0. 3% decrease in 55 to 64 age group. Male percentage was dramatically increased in that age group(45%) To conclude over all male and female percentage who did regular physical activity in Australia female percentage continuously higher from above 24 and below 65. Eventually These both had same percentage
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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