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the production and consumption’s quantity of the electricity of ten countries in 2014.

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The diagram presented below illustrates the production and consumption’s quantity of the electricity of ten countries in 2014. Overall, there were no significant differences between the total production and consumption in each of these countries. In this case, China had the highest amount both of its production and consumption. Furthermore, the second country that had substantial amount of these aspects was the United States. Meanwhile the Republic of Korea became the country with the lowest quantity on these variables. Subsequently, in Russia, the comparison of the production and consumption of electricity was known as the smallest rather than the other countries. On the other side, India was known as the country with the most significant difference of their electricity production and consumption. What’s quite interesting from this diagram is the data of Germany which was showed had an opposite total proportion of its production and consumption. Whilst the other countries had more quantity on their total production of the electricity, this country had more consumption average.
The diagram presented below illustrates the
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quantity of the
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electricity
of ten
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countries
in 2014.
Overall
, there were no significant differences between the total
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production
and
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consumption
in each of these countries.

In this case
, China had the highest amount both of its
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and
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.
Furthermore
, the second
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that had substantial amount of these aspects was the United States.
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Meanwhile
the Republic of Korea became the
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country
with the lowest quantity on these variables.

Subsequently
, in Russia, the comparison of the
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and
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of
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electricity
was known
as the smallest
rather
than the other
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countries
. On the other side, India
was known
as the
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country
with the most significant difference of their
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electricity
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production
and
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consumption
. What’s quite interesting from this diagram is the data of Germany which was
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showed
had an opposite total proportion of its
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and
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consumption
. Whilst the other
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countries
had more quantity on their total
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of the
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electricity
, this
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had more
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average.
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IELTS academic the production and consumption’s quantity of the electricity of ten countries in 2014.

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