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The pie charts below show the percentage of electricity production by fuel resource in France in 1990 and 2010.

The given are two pie charts showing the proportion of electricity production in five different sources, which located in France in 1990 and 2010. In general, natural gas and coal were equally important as the main sources in 1990; however, nuclear power, which was the only source, become the significant source in 2010. Both charts also illustrate that the hydro power was used less than any other sources. In 1990, electricity production by coal and natural gas were both standing at 28% compared to the trend in 2010, where natural gas and coal dramatically dropped to 4% and 13% respectively. It is clear that nuclear power generated 17% in 1990, which rose considerably to 67% after 20 years. Whereas the percentage of oil was 28% in 1990, it plummeted to 13% in 2010; in addition, hydro power stood at 6% of the total electricity production, but it reached a low percentage at only 2% in 2010.
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two pie charts showing the proportion of electricity production in five
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sources
, which located in France in 1990 and 2010.

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, natural gas and coal were
equally
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important
as the main
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sources
in 1990;
however
, nuclear
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power
, which was the
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only
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source
, become the significant
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source
in 2010. Both charts
also
illustrate that the hydro
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power
was
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used
less than any other sources.

In 1990, electricity production by coal and natural gas were both standing at 28% compared to the trend in 2010, where natural gas and coal
dramatically
dropped to 4% and 13%
respectively
.

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clear
that nuclear
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power
generated 17% in 1990, which rose
considerably
to 67% after 20 years.

Whereas the percentage of oil was 28% in 1990, it plummeted to 13% in 2010;
in addition
, hydro
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power
stood at 6% of the total electricity production,
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but
it reached a low percentage at
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only
2% in 2010.

IELTS academic The pie charts below show the percentage of electricity production by fuel resource in France in 1990 and 2010.

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