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The chart shows the main methods of transportation for people travelling to a university for work or study in 2004 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons wherever relevant.

The two pie charts compare the percentages of travellers using five traffic methods to commute to a university for work and study in 2004 and 2009. In general, after five years, buses overtook cars to be commuters’ top preference as transport mediums. It is also obvious to see that while the proportion of people travelling by cars decreased significantly from 2004 to 2009, the popularity of other methods marked an upward trend. In 2004, over half of those (51%) travelling to the university used cars as their main mode of transport, making automobiles the most preferred one, followed by bus with 33%. However, the figure for car users experienced a nearly twofold decrease to only 28% in 2009. Witnessing a reverse trend, after a 5-year period, the percentage of bus-based travellers rose by 11%. The trend of preferring buses to cars could be attributed to installing a new bus stop in 2006 and alterations to the car park at the university in 2008. An upward pattern was observed in the proportions of pedestrians, train passengers, and bicycle riders. Marginally more people chose to travel by train or walked to the university from 2004 to 2009, accounting for insignificant percentages of less than 6% between 2004 and 2009. These means are the least favoured by travellers. However, a more substantial rise, from 9% to 16%, was seen in bicycles.
The two pie charts compare the percentages of
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travellers
using five traffic methods to commute to a
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university
for work and study in 2004 and 2009.
In general
, after five years, buses overtook
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cars
to be commuters’ top preference as transport mediums. It is
also
obvious to
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see
that while the proportion of
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people
travelling by
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cars
decreased
significantly
from 2004 to 2009, the popularity of other methods marked an upward trend. In 2004, over half of those (51%) travelling to the
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university
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used
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cars
as their main mode of transport, making automobiles the most preferred one, followed by bus with 33%.
However
, the figure for
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car
users experienced a
nearly
twofold decrease to
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only
28% in 2009. Witnessing a reverse trend, after a 5-year period, the percentage of bus-based
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travellers
rose by 11%. The trend of preferring buses to
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cars
could
be attributed
to installing a new bus
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stop
in 2006 and alterations to the
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car
park at the
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university
in 2008.

An upward pattern
was observed
in the proportions of pedestrians, train passengers, and bicycle riders.
Marginally
more
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people
chose to travel by train or walked to the
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university
from 2004 to 2009, accounting for insignificant percentages of less than 6% between 2004 and 2009. These means are the least
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favoured
by
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travellers
.
However
, a more substantial rise, from 9% to 16%, was
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seen
in bicycles.

IELTS academic The chart shows the main methods of transportation for people travelling to a university for work or study in 2004 and 2009.

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