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The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years.

The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years. yXPBP
The pie chart illustrates the comparison between two different two different year data that the people between 18 to 2 age group use to watch television in Canada. Overwhelmingly, in 2009 about one-third(34%) of device used was conventional television which has drastically reduced over a decade to about two in twenty(10%). The second widely used device inn 2009 is laptop, about one in five (20%) people used to watch television has reduced to 12 percent. Third popularly used device in 2009 was mobile phone, which got a steady increase through out the year from 15% to 26%. People have also started to limit the usage of desktop computer to watch television from less than a quarter(18%) to twelve percentage. The usage of flat screen and tablet has been facing a peak rise over the decade from 8% to 27% and 5% to 19% respectively. Overall, the report from the pie chart can conclude that as technology people prefer to watch television in flat screen television and tablets in Canada by 2019.
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over a decade to about two in twenty(10%).

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device inn 2009 is laptop, about one in five (20%)
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from less than a quarter(18%) to twelve percentage.

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, the report from the pie chart can conclude that as technology
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and tablets in Canada by 2019.
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IELTS academic The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years.

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