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The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010.

The two pie charts give information about what households spent their money on goods and services in 1950 and 2010. It is immediately obvious that there are some quite significant differences / some things are significantly different between the two charts. In 2010 the largest proportion of expenditure was food whereas in 1950 it was on housing, with food for just 11. 2%. There is a great difference in terms of the amount of housing expenditure between the two years. In 1950 72. 1% of the total household budget / the total of what households spent went towards housing, compared to only 22% in 2010. There has been a notable increase in amount of money spent on transportation between the two dates. In addition, the charts show a significant rise in the proportion of money spent on health care in 2010 compared to 1950. There are some similarities, however. For example, in both 1950 and 2010 people spent a similar proportion on education.
The two pie charts give information about what households
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their money on
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and services in 1950 and 2010. It is immediately obvious that there are
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quite significant differences /
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significantly
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between the two charts.

In 2010 the largest proportion of expenditure was food whereas in 1950 it was on housing, with food for
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11. 2%. There is a great difference in terms of the amount of housing expenditure between the two years. In 1950 72. 1% of the total household budget / the total of what households
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went towards housing, compared to
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22% in 2010.

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on transportation between the two dates.
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a significant rise in the proportion of money
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on health care in 2010 compared to 1950.

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similarities,
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, in both 1950 and 2010
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people
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a similar proportion on education.

IELTS academic The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010.

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