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The bar chart below shows the hours per week that teenagers spend doing certain activities in Chester from 2002 to 2007.

The chart illustrates the prevalence of seven different activities like shopping, sports, watching movies and the average weekly hours that the teenage population of Chester spent on these activities in a given period of time ( from 2002 to 2007). It is evident from the graph that the youngsters spent most of their time infront of the television, and the time spent watching television increased from 25 hours per week in 2002 to about 35 hours per week in 2007. On the other hand, Bowling was the least common activity among the teenagers of Chester throughout the given time and its trend further decreased over the years from 2002 to 2007. While, their interest in DVDs increased from 2002, peaked to the value of almost 18 hours a week in 2004, then started to fall. Moreover, the graph tells us about the increasing and decreasing trend of various activities among the young population of Chester. Over the period of these six years, the teenagers spent most of their week going to pubs and watching television instead of playing sports, bowling and doing homework.
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IELTS academic The bar chart below shows the hours per week that teenagers spend doing certain activities in Chester from 2002 to 2007.

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