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The pie charts below show numbers of foreign students in Tokyo in 2000 and 2010.

The pie charts below show numbers of foreign students in Tokyo in 2000 and 2010. 55MYB
Illustrated here are the pie charts comparing how many aboard students were exchanged in Tokyo from four various nationalities over three decades, starting form 1990. Overall, it is noticeable that there was an upward trend observed in numbers of German and US students. However, an opposite trend is found in French and British, which witnessed a decline. Surprisingly, total number gradually increased over the course of the study. Focusing on, British and German, in 1990, the number of British and German accounted for 95 and 92 people, respectively. Following year, there was a stable trend in the number of British, while that of German significantly climbed up to 168 people. Interestingly, only 6 people of British was found in Tokyo in 2010, which was inordinate times smaller than that of German, which experienced 450 people. Turning to, American and French, from the year started, American has never been an exchange student before until 2000, 90 people of American enrolled in an exchange course in Tokyo. Moreover, there was a slight drop in number of French, which diminished from 37 to 33 in one-decade. In addition, whereas the number of American skyrocketed to 138 people, that of French substantially decreased to only 6 people.
Illustrated here are the pie charts comparing how
many
aboard students
were exchanged
in Tokyo from four various nationalities over three decades, starting form 1990.

Overall
, it is noticeable that there was an upward trend observed in
numbers
of German and US students.
However
, an opposite trend
is found
in French and British, which witnessed a decline.
Surprisingly
, total
number
gradually
increased over the course of the study.

Focusing on, British and German, in 1990, the
number
of British and German accounted for 95 and 92
people
,
respectively
. Following year, there was a stable trend in the
number
of British, while that of German
significantly
climbed up to 168
people
.
Interestingly
,
only
6
people
of British
was found
in Tokyo in 2010, which was inordinate times smaller than that of German, which experienced 450
people
.

Turning to, American and French, from the year
started
, American has never been an exchange student
before
until 2000, 90
people
of American enrolled in an exchange course in Tokyo.
Moreover
, there was a slight drop in
number
of French, which diminished from 37 to 33 in one-decade.
In addition
, whereas the
number
of American skyrocketed to 138
people
, that of French
substantially
decreased to
only
6
people
.
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