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The pie charts below show exports from various EU countries to India and China in 2000 and 2011.

The pie charts below show exports from various EU countries to India and China in 2000 and 2011. Wy5qk
In the year 2011 Germany has the major share in the exportation of goods in both India (1/4th of the whole) and China (Slightly less than 1/2 of the whole). But, when it comes to the year 2000 United Kingdom has a major hold in India (slightly greater than 1/4th of the whole) and in China Germany is responsible for 38 percent of the exports. Sweden, Spain, Netherlands, and Finland all have the same amount of exports for both India and China in the year 2011. Whereas, in 2000 only Spain and Netherlands have similar exports. After United Kingdom (India in 2000) and Germany (India in 2011), Belgium is one of the greatest exporters for the country in both the years i. e. 1/4th of the whole in 2000 and 1/5th of the whole in 2011.
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2000 United Kingdom has a major hold in India (
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and in China Germany is responsible for 38 percent of the exports. Sweden, Spain, Netherlands, and Finland all have the same amount of exports for both India and China in the
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2011. Whereas, in 2000
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Spain and Netherlands have similar exports.
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(India in 2000) and Germany (India in 2011), Belgium is one of the greatest exporters for the country in both the years
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IELTS academic The pie charts below show exports from various EU countries to India and China in 2000 and 2011.

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