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The pie charts below illustrate the avarage household expenditures in a country from 1950 to 2010.

The pie charts below illustrate the avarage household expenditures in a country from 1950 to 2010. 70Kl2
The pie charts illustrate average outlays on household from 1950 to 2010. The units are described percentagewise. Overall, housing made up significant part of the chart while health care covered the smallest portion of it in the year of 1950. In comparison, in the year of 2010 food took the leading part of the chart whereas health care was still the least part of it. At the beginning of the period, food was more than one tenth and it increased more than threefold till the end of the period. Health care showed the lowest number in the chart with 2. 4℅ in 1959, and almost doubled in 2010. Transportation and other sections started with 3. 3℅ and 4. 4℅ in the beginning and became 14℅ and 19. 2℅ at the end. In contrast, housing that took the most significant part of 72. 1℅ in 1950, was only 22℅ in 2010. Education at the same time started with 6. 6℅, and with a slight decrease it became 6. 3℅ in the year of 2010.
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illustrate average outlays on household from 1950 to 2010. The units are
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, housing made up significant
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while health care covered the smallest portion of it in the year of 1950.
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of the
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whereas health care was
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of it. At the beginning of the period, food was more than one tenth and it increased more than threefold till the
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of the period. Health care
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the lowest number in the
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with 2. 4℅ in 1959, and almost doubled in 2010. Transportation and other sections
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with 3. 3℅ and 4. 4℅ in the beginning and became 14℅ and 19. 2℅ at the
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In contrast
, housing that took the most significant
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of 72. 1℅ in 1950, was
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22℅ in 2010. Education at the same time
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with 6. 6℅, and with a slight decrease it became 6. 3℅ in the year of 2010.
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IELTS academic The pie charts below illustrate the avarage household expenditures in a country from 1950 to 2010.

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