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the Graphs Below Show Enrolments Overseas Students Local Students

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the graphs below present the number os native students in Australia and students from other countries in the period of ten years. as we can see from 2001 to 2010, both total of local students and abroad students are increase. overseas students start at the lower number compair with Australian students so it had a big jump from 20000 to 80000 students after 10 years. students from Australia increase slowly just 40000 students starting from 40000 students in 2001 after 10 years. the commencing of abroad students in the period of ten years had a moderate increase from approximate 20000 in 2001 to 40000 in 2009 and stay stable to 2010. different from overseas students, the commencing of local students did not change much, fluctuating above and below 20000 in ten years
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from other countries in the period of ten years.

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from 2001 to 2010, both total of local
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and abroad
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are increase.
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after 10 years.
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in 2001 after 10 years.

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in the period of ten years had a moderate increase from approximate 20000 in 2001 to 40000 in 2009 and stay stable to 2010.
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, the commencing of local
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IELTS academic the Graphs Below Show Enrolments Overseas Students Local Students

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