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The line graph shows the information about the levels of birth in the USA and China within a period of 8 decades, from 1920 to 2000.

The line graph shows the information about the levels of birth in the USA and China within a period of 8 decades, from 1920 to 2000. 2xgLA

Generally, the natality in both countries experienced a downward trend. However, there was an extreme fluctuation in the middle of the period. Moreover, from the beginning until the end of the figure, the USA’s birth levels outraced China’s. Starting from 1920 to 1950, the rates of USA’s natality showed a sharp fluctuation. In the end of this instability, the percentages hit a lowest-point of about 5% in 1945 and reached the peak of 15% in 1950. Then, the figure showed a gradual decrease until the end of the period, where the number reduced by almost 8%. China’s trend was a bit different. Between 1920 and 1950, the newborns levels in China displayed fluctuation significantly, and touched a greatest point in the middle of 1950 of 20%. Then, there was a dramatic decline occurred in 1995 of less than 10%. It continued to slightly decrease until the end of the period, and reached a lowest rate of about 3% in 2000.

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 of the figure, the USA’s birth levels outraced China’s.

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