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cell phone subscriber, Marysville 1995-2015

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EX2 Subscriber The line graph given provided how many men and women subscribed cell phone service in Marysville from 1995 to 2015. The number of subscribers of each gender rose dramatically at similar rate during the ten-year period. The number of male subscribers increased significantly between 1995 and 2005. In 1995, approximately 500 men subscribed cell phone service. The figure rocketed to 2, 500 subscribers in 2005 and it was stable until 2010. Soon after, the number of male subscribers grew slightly to 2, 750 subscribers in 2015. Similarly, the number of female subscribers rose sharply from 1995 to 2005. There were 520 female subscribers in 1995 and went up to 2500 in 2005. However, the amount of female subscribers fell to 2250 in 2010 and remained steady to 2015. Overall, the number of male and female subscribers increased significantly from 1995 to 2005. In 2015, The number of Male subscribers was more than female.
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and women subscribed cell phone service in Marysville from 1995 to 2015. The
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of each gender rose
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at similar rate during the ten-year period.

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of male
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increased
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between 1995 and 2005. In 1995, approximately 500
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in 2005 and it was stable until 2010.
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in 2015.

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rose
sharply
from 1995 to 2005.

There were 520
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in 1995 and went up to 2500 in 2005.
However
, the amount of
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female
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fell to 2250 in 2010 and remained steady to 2015.

Overall
, the
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of male and
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female
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increased
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1995 to 2005. In 2015, The
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was more than
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IELTS academic cell phone subscriber, Marysville 1995-2015

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155 words
6.0
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