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The pie chart shows the water consumption while the bar graph shows the residential water usage both in Australia in 2004.

The pie chart shows the water consumption while the bar graph shows the residential water usage both in Australia in 2004. Ogm1d
The pie chart shows how the Australian population used water in 2004. It is divided into four areas of society such as industry, government, business, residential (apartments and houses) and other. Instead, with the bar chart, we can see where people used the most water in the different rooms of the houses. According to the pie chart, Australians used more water in their houses. More than 50% of the water was employed in this context. Secondly, we can find an important usage of the water in the apartments. In the business and the government fields, the utilization of water was around 10%. The consumption in government represented 6% and in other 3%. The graph illustrates that in 2014 the two main parts of the houses where the water was consumed more were the bathrooms and the gardens with a percentage of around 30%. Another area with an important correlation with water utilization was the laundry room. The water was used with a minor intensity in the toilets and in the kitchens.
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how the Australian population
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in 2004. It
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government
, business, residential (apartments and
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people
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the most
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water
in the
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different
rooms of the
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houses
.

According to the pie chart, Australians
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used
more
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water
in their
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houses
. More than 50% of the
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water
was employed
in this context.

Secondly
, we can find an
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important
usage of the
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water
in the apartments.

In the business and the
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government
fields, the utilization of
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water
was around 10%. The consumption in
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government
represented 6% and in other 3%.

The graph illustrates that in 2014 the two main parts of the
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houses
where the
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water
was consumed
more were the bathrooms and the gardens with a percentage of around 30%. Another area with an
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important
correlation with
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water
utilization was the laundry room. The
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water
was
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used
with a minor intensity in the toilets and in the kitchens.
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IELTS academic The pie chart shows the water consumption while the bar graph shows the residential water usage both in Australia in 2004.

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