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The given line chart represents the percentage of the population older than 65 in three countries, THE USA, Sweden, and Japan, in a span of 100 years.

The given line chart represents the percentage of the population older than 65 in three countries, THE USA, Sweden, and Japan, in a span of 100 years. xgRkN
The given line chart represents the percentage of the population older than 65 in three countries, THE USA, Sweden, and Japan, in a span of 100 years. It's estimated that the population aged 65 and above of all countries will significantly rise until 2040, and Japan experience the fastest increase towards the end of the period under review at that. It can be clearly seen from the graph that all three countries started out period described with a population of the elderly below 10%. The lowest percentage displayed Japan having only approximately 5% of the seniors, whereas the USA showed 9% and Sweden stayed in between. On the whole, Sweden and The USA showed a similar trend between 1940 and 1980 when the USA achieved 15% whereas Sweden displayed nearly the same percentage as the former. In 1980 in the USA, the numbers stabilized, fluctuating nearly 15% up to 2020, while Sweden was the first country, which displayed 20% of people aged 65 and above, approximately in 2017. It is supposed that both countries Sweden and the USA will demonstrate a substantial jump up to roughly 25% after 2030. On the contrary, Japan had the lowest number of the elderly, which was always lover 10%, until 2020, when, as predicted, it is supposed to rocket and overtake Sweden and The USA with tremendous numbers slightly over 25%. Moreover, Japan was the only country, which the population of the elderly declined gradually in the first five decades from 5% to around 3%. Although, the figure slowly rose to 10% in the next 40 years.
The
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population
older than 65 in three
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countries
, THE USA, Sweden, and
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Japan
, in a span of 100 years.

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population
aged 65 and above of all
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countries
will
significantly
rise until 2040, and
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Japan
experience the fastest increase towards the
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end
of the period under review at that.

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clearly
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seen
from the graph that all three
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countries
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started
out period
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with a
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population
of the elderly below 10%. The lowest percentage displayed
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Japan
having
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only
approximately 5% of the seniors, whereas the USA
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showed
9% and Sweden stayed in between.
On the whole
, Sweden and The USA
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showed
a similar trend between 1940 and 1980 when the USA achieved 15% whereas Sweden displayed
nearly
the same percentage as the former. In 1980 in the USA, the numbers stabilized, fluctuating
nearly
15% up to 2020, while Sweden was the
first
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country
, which displayed 20% of
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people
aged 65 and above, approximately in 2017. It
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that both
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Sweden and the USA will demonstrate a substantial jump up to roughly 25% after 2030.

On the contrary
,
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Japan
had the lowest number of the elderly, which was always lover 10%, until 2020, when, as predicted, it
is supposed
to rocket and overtake Sweden and The USA with tremendous numbers
slightly
over 25%.
Moreover
,
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Japan
was the
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country
, which the
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of the elderly declined
gradually
in the
first
five decades from 5% to around 3%.
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IELTS academic The given line chart represents the percentage of the population older than 65 in three countries, THE USA, Sweden, and Japan, in a span of 100 years.

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