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The line graph delineates the proportion of the population of Japan in three age groups beginning from 1960 and projections for 2040.

The line graph delineates the proportion of the population of Japan in three age groups beginning from 1960 and projections for 2040. JLkaD
The line graph delineates the proportion of the population of Japan in three age groups beginning from 1960 and projections for 2040. Overall, Japan was and is predicted to experience population ageing. Additionally, the propotion of individuals aged 0-14 and 15-64 shows downturns, while the figure for the other group witnesses an upward trend over the period shown. The percentage of people belonging to the 15-64 age group accounted for 65% in 1960 and is predicted to fall to above 50% in 2030. The figure is expected to rise moderately to 55% and remain the highest figure. Meanwhile, the figure for the 65-and-over age group, with the starting point of 5% in 1960, saw a notable increase to over 25% and is likely to keep growing slightly to 35% in 2040. By contrast, the proportion of individuals aged 0-14 was 30% in 1960. The figure is predicted to decline dramatically to 10% in 2040 after having reached its peak at 35% in 1970.
The line graph delineates the proportion of the population of Japan in three age
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groups
beginning from 1960 and projections for 2040.

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, Japan was and
is predicted
to experience population
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ageing
.
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, the
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propotion
of individuals aged 0-14 and 15-64
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shows
downturns, while the
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figure
for the other
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group
witnesses an upward trend over the period shown.

The percentage of
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people
belonging to the 15-64 age
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group
accounted for 65% in 1960 and
is predicted
to fall to above 50% in 2030. The
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figure
is
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expected
to rise
moderately
to 55% and remain the highest
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figure
. Meanwhile, the
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figure
for the 65-and-over age
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group
, with the starting point of 5% in 1960,
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saw
a notable increase to over 25% and is likely to
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keep
growing
slightly
to 35% in 2040.

By contrast, the proportion of individuals aged 0-14 was 30% in 1960. The
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figure
is predicted
to decline
dramatically
to 10% in 2040 after having reached its peak at 35% in 1970.
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IELTS academic The line graph delineates the proportion of the population of Japan in three age groups beginning from 1960 and projections for 2040.

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