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The graph provides information about the number of females and males students who graduated at University from 1992 to 2007 in Canada.

The graph provides information about the number of females and males students who graduated at University from 1992 to 2007 in Canada. JLkg0
Overall, athougt the number of graduates showed the number of female is higher than males in every year. Accoding to the graph the number of females, there are some flucutuations from year to year. As regrads, there was a decreased steadily in 1998. Morover, the trand was rose rapidly over the year 2002, followed by a sudden increase to from 110, 00 to almost 150, 000 in 2006. However the number of males fluctuated. More specificailly, there was a rise in 1995 and gradually drop to nearly 70, 000 in 1998. Morover, there was consyderably upward. That is, between 200 and 2006, its rising from 70, 000 to nearly 100, 000. Similarly, it is noticedable that the trend for number of graduates males and females were reached a high in the year 2006.
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, the
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2002, followed by a sudden increase to from 110, 00 to almost 150, 000 in 2006.
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, there was a rise in 1995 and
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