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The pie chart shows the percentage of tourists coming to Phu Quoc Island in 2017

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The given pie chart gives information about how many percent of travelers came to Phu Quoc Island from many different nations, namely the USA, the UK, China, Thailand and Korea in the year 2017. Overall, as can be seen from the pie chart that while the proportion of people travelling from China was highest, the opposite was true for the figure for Korea in the period shown. A closer look at the pie chart reveals that the percentage of Chinese travelling to Phu Quoc Island held the first position, at 40%; in contrast the figure of people in Korea was lowest, at 6% in 2017. On the other hand, Phu Quoc Island had the second greatest proportion of people coming to Phu Quoc Island from America, at less than a third, in comparison with the percentages of people in both England and Thailand, at 11% and 13% respectively in the year 2017.
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travelling from China was highest, the opposite was true for the figure for Korea in the period shown.

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Phu
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Quoc
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held the
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the figure of
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in Korea was lowest, at 6% in 2017.

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had the second greatest proportion of
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coming to
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from America, at less than a third,
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in both England and Thailand, at 11% and 13%
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IELTS academic The pie chart shows the percentage of tourists coming to Phu Quoc Island in 2017

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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