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The pie chart shows the career paths of graduates with Anthropology degrees, and the table shows the salaries of anthropologists after five years of employment.

The pie chart shows the career paths of graduates with Anthropology degrees, and the table shows the salaries of anthropologists after five years of employment. e5KEx
The pie chart shows the career paths of graduates with Anthropology degrees, and the table shows the salaries of anthropologists after five years of employment. Overall, most of the graduates found full-time employment and the highest proportion of the top earning anthropologists worked for the government. The pie chart illustrates that a little over half of the graduates were in full-time employment, followed at quite a distance, by part-time employment at 15% and unemployment at 12%. Those in postgraduate studies or unknown occupations accounted for 8%, respectively. The fewest, at only 5%, each, were those doing both part-time work and postgraduate study. The table reveals that graduates working in private businesses had the lowest salaries as almost half were earning salaries from $25-74, 999, 25% received $75-99, 999, and only 30% were being paid over $100, 000. Both freelancers and government employees had 5% earning $25, 000-49, 999, 15% making $50, -74, 999 and then the other 80% on salaries of $75, 000 to over $100, 000.
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with Anthropology degrees, and the table
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found full-time
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and the highest proportion of the top earning anthropologists worked for the
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over half of the
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, followed at quite a distance, by part-time
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at 15% and unemployment at 12%. Those in postgraduate studies or unknown occupations accounted for 8%,
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5%, each, were those doing both part-time work and postgraduate study.

The table reveals that
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working in private businesses had the lowest
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as almost half were earning
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from $25-74, 999, 25% received $75-99, 999, and
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30% were
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over $100, 000. Both freelancers and
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employees had 5% earning $25, 000-49, 999, 15% making $50, -74, 999 and then the other 80% on
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of $75, 000 to over $100, 000.
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IELTS academic The pie chart shows the career paths of graduates with Anthropology degrees, and the table shows the salaries of anthropologists after five years of employment.

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