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The bar chart illustrates the amount of electricity which were generated and utilized by the top ten countries in 2014.

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The bar chart illustrates the amount of electricity which were generated and utilized by the top ten countries in 2014. Overall, what stands out from the graph is that China was the most developed country in both electricity production and utilization process, whereas the last on the list was The Republic of Korea with a lowest amount of generation and usage rate. Looking at the bar chart in more detail, we can see that China produced and consumed the most, at 5, 398 billion and 5, 322 kWh, respectively. The next nearest country in terms of both statistics was the US, where residents consumed 3, 866 kilowatts an hour and produced slightly more at 4, 099 kWh. The remainder of the Top 5 – Russia, India, and Japan generated and used up about four to five times less power than China or the USA. The next countries’ (namely, Canada, France, Brazil, Germany, Republic of Korea ) produced and consumed the least electric power than the countries which we have mentioned above. Another interesting point that within the countries listed only Germany consumed slightly more energy than they produced.
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in both electricity production and utilization process, whereas the last on the list was The Republic of Korea with
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lowest amount of generation and usage rate.

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that China
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the most, at 5, 398 billion and 5, 322 kWh,
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. The
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in terms of both statistics was the US, where residents
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3, 866 kilowatts an hour and
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slightly
more at 4, 099 kWh.

The remainder of the Top 5
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Russia, India, and Japan generated and
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up about four to five times less power than China or the USA.
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the least electric power than the
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which we have mentioned above. Another interesting point that within the
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Germany
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IELTS academic The bar chart illustrates the amount of electricity which were generated and utilized by the top ten countries in 2014.

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