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The diagram represent how chocolate made and chocolate price divided up among those involved in the process

The diagram represent how chocolate made and chocolate price divided up among those involved in the process 5L5RV
At the first glance, coca is grinding and wasre material go down and others is transfered into coca liquir. Apart from this coca liquir is seprated in to two parts, industrial chocalte and pressing. The material is sent to the industrial choclate for prepration. Sugar and other ingrediants are added into choclate and it is make a choclate bar However, supermarket price almost one third percent adeed in the whole choclate bar but, farmer parpotion is three tenth less than the supermarket price in choclate bar. Furthermore, choclate company and tax price have only two third percentage difference in the choclate bar cost. Finally, The cost of ingrediants and over head are pinnale point about 37percent price involved into the choclate bar cost.
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first
glance, coca is grinding and
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wasre
material go down
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and others
is
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transfered
into coca
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liquir
. Apart from this coca
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liquir
is
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seprated
in to two parts, industrial
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chocalte
and pressing. The material is
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sent
to the industrial
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choclate
for
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prepration
. Sugar and other
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ingrediants
are
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added
into
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choclate
and it is
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make
a
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choclate
bar

However
, supermarket
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price
almost one third percent
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adeed
in the whole
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choclate
bar
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but
, farmer
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parpotion
is three tenth less than the supermarket
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price
in
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choclate
bar.
Furthermore
,
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choclate
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company
and tax
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price
have
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only
two third percentage difference in the
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choclate
bar cost.
Finally
, The cost of
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ingrediants
and over head are
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pinnale
point about 37percent
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price
involved into the
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choclate
bar cost.
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IELTS academic The diagram represent how chocolate made and chocolate price divided up among those involved in the process

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  American English
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