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The pie chart provides information about how employment is divided in Tanzania and Ireland in 1999.

The pie chart provides information about how employment is divided in Tanzania and Ireland in 1999. Aj05l
The pie chart provides information about how employment is divided in Tanzania and Ireland in 1999. Overall, the number of worker who worked in agriculture were the highest percentage in all type of work in Tanzania whereas services accounted for the vast majority of people in Ireland. Looking at the data, it can be seen from the pie chart that the vast majority of Tanzanians employed in agriculture were the highest figure with 79% whereas in Ireland, the figure was quite small, with only 2%. Meanwhile, three- fourth of worker who worked in services, which was the most popular work’s type in Ireland, with 71, 1%. In comparison with Tanzania, services which including tourism was 14. 2%, was much lower than in Ireland. In addition, a fifth of workers employed in manufacturing in Ireland, with 21. 5% whereas in Tanzania, which accounted for only 6. 2%. The figure of Tanzanians employed in Construction was much lower than in Ireland, with 0. 6% and 4. 1% respectively. Worker who employed in Energy and water in Ireland accounted for small percentage, only 1. 3%.
The pie chart provides information about how employment
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in Tanzania and Ireland in 1999.
Overall
, the number of
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worker
who worked in agriculture were the highest percentage in all type of work in Tanzania whereas services accounted for the vast majority of
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people
in Ireland.

Looking at the data, it can be
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from the pie chart that the vast majority of Tanzanians
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employed
in agriculture were the highest figure with 79% whereas in Ireland, the figure was quite
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small
, with
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only
2%. Meanwhile, three- fourth of
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who worked in services, which was the most popular work’s type in Ireland, with 71, 1%.
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with Tanzania, services which including tourism was 14. 2%, was much lower than in Ireland.

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, a fifth of
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workers
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employed
in manufacturing in Ireland, with 21. 5% whereas in Tanzania, which accounted for
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only
6. 2%. The figure of Tanzanians
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employed
in Construction was much lower than in Ireland, with 0. 6% and 4. 1%
respectively
.
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Worker
who
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employed
in Energy and water in Ireland accounted for
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small
percentage,
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only
1. 3%.
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IELTS academic The pie chart provides information about how employment is divided in Tanzania and Ireland in 1999.

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