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The pie chart illustrates the overall British exports, however, bar chart gives the information about Britain countries' export in 2010 and 2011.

The pie chart illustrates the overall British exports, however, bar chart gives the information about Britain countries' export in 2010 and 2011. 2b17j
The pie chart illustrates the overall British exports, however, bar chart gives the information about Britain countries' export in 2010 and 2011. Overall, it is clear that although Vehicles have the highest percentage of total British exports all other items, the United States (US) country had the largest exports than other countries, however, the exports decreased slightly in 2011 in all countries. Meanwhile, the count of exports had fluctuated in 2010 in Germany, France, and Irish Republic, where Netherland had fewest export in 2010. According to pie chart, Vehicles had the largest amount of total British export, accounting 34% whereas Pharmaceuticals exported 25%. Though Gems and Precious Minerals had an exact double ratio of export than Aircraft and Electronics, considering 11% and 10% exports respectively. In terms of countries, US had the highest amount of exports that is, around 32, 000 million pounds in 2010 and 2011. Germany had 20, 000 million pounds in 2010, but there was significant rose in 2011, accounts 28, 000 million pounds. In France and Irish Republic had similarities in 2010 and 2011. It is just below 20, 000 million exported in both the years, even though, Irish people had almost 15, 000 million pounds export in 2010 and 2011. The Netherlands had lowest export in 2010 still it is increased dramatically till almost 20, 000.
The pie chart illustrates the
overall
British
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exports
,
however
, bar chart gives the information about Britain countries'
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export
in 2010 and 2011.

Overall
, it is
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clear
that although Vehicles have the highest percentage of total British
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exports
all other items, the United States (US)
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country
had the largest
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exports
than other
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countries
,
however
, the
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exports
decreased
slightly
in 2011 in all
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countries
. Meanwhile, the count of
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exports
had fluctuated in 2010 in Germany, France, and Irish Republic, where
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Netherland
had
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fewest
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export
in 2010.

According to pie chart, Vehicles had the largest amount of total British
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export
, accounting 34% whereas Pharmaceuticals exported 25%. Though Gems and Precious Minerals had an exact double ratio of
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export
than Aircraft and Electronics, considering 11% and 10%
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exports
respectively
.

In terms of
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countries
, US had the highest amount of
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exports
that is
, around 32, 000
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million
pounds in 2010 and 2011. Germany had 20, 000
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million
pounds in 2010,
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but
there was significant rose in 2011, accounts 28, 000
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million
pounds. In France and Irish Republic had similarities in 2010 and 2011. It is
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just
below 20, 000
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million
exported in both the years,
even though
, Irish
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people
had almost 15, 000
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million
pounds
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export
in 2010 and 2011. The Netherlands had
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lowest
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export
in 2010
still
it
is increased
dramatically
till almost 20, 000.
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IELTS academic The pie chart illustrates the overall British exports, however, bar chart gives the information about Britain countries' export in 2010 and 2011.

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