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The given bar chart illustrates the number of sites visited by internet users in Canada between 2014 and 2015.

The given bar chart illustrates the number of sites visited by internet users in Canada between 2014 and 2015. 6x1Dx
The given bar chart illustrates the number of sites visited by internet users in Canada between 2014 and 2015. Consequently, as is presented from the given data, in general, there was an increasingly growth in using one more site during the reporting period. Although the highest tendency for visiting the sites in 2014 and 2015 was owned by one site, but this number declined markedly from 38% in 2014 to 28% in 2015 and this decrease was also observed for the number of people who did not tend to use social networking. It dropped from 23% to 27% between 2014 and 2015. However, the proportion of internet users in two sites, three sites, four sites and five sites category, all went up over the period under consideration and this statistic figure for the users preferring two sites, with over one- fifth of proportion, after the preference for one site was placed in the second highest popularity between the social networking. 160 words.
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visited by internet users in Canada between 2014 and 2015.

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from the
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given
data,
in general
, there was an
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increasingly growth
in using one more
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site
during the reporting period.

Although the highest tendency for visiting the
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sites
in 2014 and 2015 was
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owned
by one
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site
,
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but
this number declined
markedly
from 38% in 2014 to 28% in 2015 and this decrease was
also
observed for the number of
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people
who did not tend to
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use
social networking. It dropped from 23% to 27% between 2014 and 2015.

However
, the proportion of internet users in two
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sites
, three
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sites
, four
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sites
and five
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sites
category, all went up over the period under consideration and this statistic figure for the users preferring two
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sites
, with over one- fifth of proportion, after the preference for one
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site
was placed
in the second highest popularity between the social networking.

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IELTS academic The given bar chart illustrates the number of sites visited by internet users in Canada between 2014 and 2015.

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162 words
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