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The graph shows internet usage in Taiwan by aged group, 1998 and 2000

The graph shows internet usage in Taiwan by aged group, 1998 and 2000 WyLj0
The given bar chart illustrates the information about the proportion of internet users in tawin by different aged groups between 1998 and 2000Overall, it is evident from the graph that percentage Of internet users of two age groups had increased. Whereas decrease in noticed in the values of two remaining age groups Initially, age group less than 15 and users more than 50, their percentage had inclined over the given time period. In 1998, 2 users under less than 15 aged group used in term and4% users were observed more than 50 age group value percentage of both the groups rose to 8%in 1999. On the otherhand, in 2000 the proportion of internet users of more than 50 and less than 15 had increased to 9%, and 10%respectively. However, the least percentage of 16-30 aged group and 31- 50 age group who prefer to use internet that was only 4 and 7 percentage.
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between 1998 and 2000Overall, it is evident from the graph that
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less than 15 and
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more than 50, their
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had inclined over the
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rose to 8%in 1999. On the
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of more than 50 and less than 15 had increased to 9%, and 10%
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of 16-30 aged
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31- 50
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who prefer to
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