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The diagrams below show the transformation of the area around Tumbledown between 1995 and 2010.

The diagrams below show the transformation of the area around Tumbledown between 1995 and 2010. 561gP
The maps provide data about the development of the territory around Tumbledown from 1995 to 2010. Overall, there had been a lot of changes in the area such as replacement of rural infrastructures by other buildings, especially related to science. Also, the size of Tumbledown increased over the given period. In 1995, there were park and school located at the north coast of the river, which had been demolished and replaced with science park and museum and hotel with spa, respectively by 2010. Additionally, a new shop was built just near to the river. The bridge connecting north and south parts of the area remained intact during 15 years. The farmhouse and the farmland were situated at the Southwest part of the territory. These places were converted into science academy and laboratories in 2010. The hospital located at the south coast of the river had been demolished and a new hi-tech centre was constructed at just near to that place. The wood was at the west, however, it was moved to the Southeast after 15 years.
The maps provide data about the development of the territory around Tumbledown from 1995 to 2010.

Overall
, there had been
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a lot of
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changes
in the area such as replacement of rural infrastructures by other buildings,
especially
related to science.
Also
, the size of Tumbledown increased over the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
period.

In 1995, there were park and school located at the north coast of the river, which had
been demolished
and replaced with science park and museum and hotel with spa,
respectively
by 2010.
Additionally
, a new shop
was built
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just
near to the river. The bridge connecting north and south parts of the area remained intact during 15 years.

The farmhouse and the farmland
were situated
at the Southwest part of the territory. These places
were converted
into science academy and laboratories in 2010. The hospital located at the south coast of the river had
been demolished
and a new hi-tech
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centre
was constructed
at
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just
near to that place. The wood was at the west,
however
, it was
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moved
to the Southeast after 15 years.
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