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The pie chart illustrates the origin of international visitors who travel to New Zealand.

The pie chart illustrates the origin of international visitors who travel to New Zealand. VEWRJ
The pie chart illustrates the origin of international visitors who travel to New Zealand. We can see the percentages of the countries and the various percentages are shown by the different largeness. First of all, as we see, the most popular and the biggest part of this pie chart which is equals to nearly half of the visitors is Australia. In other words, almost one of the two visitors is from Australia. It refers to 40% in this chart. On another hand, the least visitors come from South Korea that is shown by 3%. Additionally, The East Asia countries mentioned here which are South Korea, Japan, and China are equals to 12% by gathering 3%, 4%, and 5%. Also, the countries which are common with talking English are the United Kingdom and the United States are the second and third by order with 12% and 9%. In addition to all, except the countries we mentioned above are indicated with “other” and this group takes up place approximately 3 over 10.
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, the most popular and the biggest part of this pie chart which is equals to
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visitors
is Australia.
In other words
, almost one of the two
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visitors
is from Australia. It refers to 40% in this chart. On another hand, the least
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come
from South Korea that
is shown
by 3%.

Additionally
, The East Asia
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countries
mentioned here which are South Korea, Japan, and China are equals to 12% by gathering 3%, 4%, and 5%.
Also
, the
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countries
which are common with talking English are the United Kingdom and the United States are the second and third by order with 12% and 9%.

In addition
to all, except the
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we mentioned above
are indicated
with “other” and this group takes up place approximately 3 over 10.
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