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The diagrams illustrate the processes of making cement and concrete.

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The diagrams illustrate the processes of making cement and concrete. Overall, it can be seen that there are five stages in the cement production beginning with crushing limestone and clay and ending with packaging, meanwhile, the production of concrete has two stages. In the first process, limestone and clay are put through the crusher and converted into power. After that, the power is then poured into the mixer in which the modules are blended. In the next step, the product is heat through the rotating heater at a high temperature, followed by the grinding process to create cement which is ready for packing into bags and selling. In terms of concrete production. Cement, water, sand, and gravel are prepared with the percentage of 15%, 10%, 20%, and 50% respectively. After that, they are poured into a concrete mixer which became a form called concrete.
The diagrams illustrate the processes of making
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cement
and concrete.

Overall
, it can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
that there are five stages in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cement
production beginning with crushing limestone and clay and ending with packaging, meanwhile, the production of concrete has two stages.

In the
first
process, limestone and clay
are put
through the crusher and converted into power. After that, the power is then poured into the mixer in which the modules
are blended
. In the
next
step, the product is heat through the rotating heater at a high temperature, followed by the grinding process to create
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cement
which is ready for packing into bags and selling.

In terms of concrete production.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Cement
, water, sand, and gravel
are prepared
with the percentage of 15%, 10%, 20%, and 50%
respectively
. After that, they
are poured
into a concrete mixer which became a form called concrete.
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IELTS academic The diagrams illustrate the processes of making cement and concrete.

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