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The pie chart gives information on the proportion of carbohydrates, protein and fat in three different diets. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart gives information on the proportion of carbohydrates, protein and fat in three different diets. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Make comparisons where relevant. p8A9
The pie charts provide details on the percentages of carbohydrates, protein and fat in three various diets, namely an average diet, healthy diet and healthy diet for sport. As meticulously mentioned in three types of the charts, sports activity people required least quantity of fat, However, game players needs highest proportion of carbohydrates. In comparison, people from average diet and healthy diet necessitate equal percentage of fat. It is noticeable that, people who are pursuing different activities for physical fitness they want only 15% fat in their food. However, persons who are maintaining average diet and healthy diet both required 20% fat equivalently. Moreover, only 25% of protein consumption by sport persons, whereas, average diet candidates have highest percentage of 40% rather than rest of two kinds of diet people. Following this persons from healthy diet consume 30% protein on daily food. Despite of, eating low proportion of fat 15%, sport people including carbohydrates heavily 60% in their diet, yet carbohydrate percentage slightly decreased in diet of healthy diet people around 50%, while in average people diet carbohydrate reported very lowest consist of 40%. To conclude, fat constitutes similarly in average and healthy people diet, but this number drops significantly in healthy sports diet.
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percentages
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carbohydrates
, protein and
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fat
in three various diets,
namely
an
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average
diet,
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healthy
diet and
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healthy
diet for sport.

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meticulously
mentioned in three types of the charts,
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sports
activity
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people
required
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least
quantity of
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fat
,
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, game players needs
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highest
proportion of
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carbohydrates
.
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,
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people
from
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average
diet and
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healthy
diet necessitate equal
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percentage
of
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fat
.

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people
who are pursuing
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different
activities for physical fitness they want
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only
15%
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fat
in their food.
However
, persons who are maintaining
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average
diet and
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healthy
diet both required 20%
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fat
equivalently
.
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,
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only
25% of protein consumption by
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sport
persons, whereas,
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average
diet candidates have
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highest
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percentage
of 40%
rather
than rest of two kinds of diet
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people
. Following
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this
persons from
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healthy
diet consume 30% protein on daily food.

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fat
15%,
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sport
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people
including
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carbohydrates
heavily
60% in their diet,
yet
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carbohydrate
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percentage
slightly
decreased in diet of
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healthy
diet
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people
around 50%, while in
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average
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people
diet
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carbohydrate
reported
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very
lowest consist of 40%.

To conclude
,
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fat
constitutes
similarly
in
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average
and
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healthy
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people
diet,
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but
this number drops
significantly
in
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healthy
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sports
diet.
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IELTS academic The pie chart gives information on the proportion of carbohydrates, protein and fat in three different diets. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Make comparisons where relevant.

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