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The pie chart gives information about the country of birth

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The pie chart illustrates the information about the country of bith of people living in Austrilia and the table shows the informqtion about where they lives. In pie chart, it is observed that, about 73% of people choose to live in Austrilia where they born. In addition, about 7% of British people like to live in Austrilia. Besides that, 3 % of people, who born in New Zealand tend to live in Austrilia. Moreover about 2% of chiness people and 1% of Netherland people tend to live in Austrilia. Apart from that 14% of other people live in Austrilia. On the other hand, it is observed in table that only one per cent pf chiness people like to live in rural areas and rest people live in cites in Austrilia. Which is quite different patterns emarged as compared to any other nations. Approximately 80% of people, who belongs to Austrilia and New Zealand lives in cities and rest people lives in rural areas. About 10% of Netherlands and UK people lives in rural areas and 90% of people live in cities. Overall, in the pie chart, it is observed that most of the people who born in Austrilia, likes to live in their own country. Whereas only small amount of Netherlands people lives in Austrilia. Moreover, most of the chiness people love to live in cities rather than rural areas.
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of
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people
living in
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Austrilia
and the table
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the
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informqtion
about where they
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lives
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In pie chart, it
is observed
that, about 73% of
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people
choose to
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live
in
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Austrilia
where they born.
In addition
, about 7% of British
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people
like to
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live
in
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Austrilia
.
Besides
that, 3 % of
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people
, who born in New Zealand tend to
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live
in
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Austrilia
.
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Moreover
about 2% of
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chiness
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people
and 1% of
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Netherland
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people
tend to
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live
in
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Austrilia
. Apart from that 14% of other
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people
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live
in
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Austrilia
.

On the other hand
, it
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in table that
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one per cent pf
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chiness
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people
like to
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live
in
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rural
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areas
and rest
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people
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live
in cites in
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Austrilia
. Which is quite
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different
patterns
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emarged
as compared to any other nations. Approximately 80% of
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people
, who belongs to
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Austrilia
and New Zealand
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lives
in cities and rest
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people
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lives
in
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rural
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areas
. About 10%
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of Netherlands
and UK
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people
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lives
in
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rural
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areas
and 90% of
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people
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live
in cities.

Overall
, in the pie chart, it
is observed
that most of the
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people
who born in
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Austrilia
, likes to
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live
in their
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own
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only
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small
amount of Netherlands
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people
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lives
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Austrilia
.
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, most of the
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chiness
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people
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love
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live
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rural
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areas
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