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This map presents some challenges because there aren’t a ton of changes and the overview is a little bit tricky.

This map presents some challenges because there aren’t a ton of changes and the overview is a little bit tricky. 7WBKk
The given maps depict how the transit accessibility of a city hospital has altered from 2007 to 2010. Overall, the three-year period saw changes to the to the road layout. The salient features of this alteration are the addition of two roundabouts, public parking facilities and a bus station. According to the map of 2010, access to the city hospital were still via the same roads, namely City Road, Hospital Road and Ring Road; however, by 2010, two roundabouts had been built at the junctions shown in the map of 2007, which necessitated the removal of bus stops located on the both sides of Hospital Road. As a result of the demolition of those bus stops, a bus station was erected on the west-side of Hospital Road, with access to this being through (the)both roundabouts. The further additional feature is the car park on the right-hand of the Hospital Road, which was for both public and the city hospital’s workforce, was separated into two different car parks for each of them, with the one for public being moved to the right of the city hospital, and with the other one remained in the same place.
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given
maps depict how the transit accessibility of a city
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hospital
has altered from 2007 to 2010.

Overall
, the three-year period
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saw
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changes
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to the to the
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road
layout. The salient features of this alteration are the addition of two roundabouts, public parking facilities and a bus station.

According to the map of 2010, access to the city
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hospital
were
still
via the same
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roads
,
namely
City
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Road
,
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Hospital
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Road
and Ring
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Road
;
however
, by 2010, two roundabouts had
been built
at the junctions shown in the map of 2007, which necessitated the removal of bus
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stops
located on the both sides of
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Hospital
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Road
.
As a result
of the demolition of those bus
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stops
, a bus station
was erected
on the west-side of
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Hospital
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Road
, with access to this being through (the)both roundabouts.

The
further
additional feature is the car park on the right-hand of the
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Hospital
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Road
, which was for both public and the city
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hospital’s
workforce,
was separated
into two
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different
car parks for each of them, with the one for public being
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moved
to the right of the city
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hospital
, and with the other one remained in the same place.
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IELTS academic This map presents some challenges because there aren’t a ton of changes and the overview is a little bit tricky.

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195 words
6.5
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