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The pie chart describes their employment sectors in 2019.

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The pie chart describes their employment sectors in 2019. The statistics given in the chart were collected from Brighton University graduates. Overall, the wast majority of students went into service and manufacturing industries. The least preferred employment sectors among Brighton University graduates are charity and sport. According to the pie chart the summarized amount of students who went into service and manufacturing industries equals nearly 50%. Quarter of the graduates chose education and politics&government as their employment sectors. The other quarter is spread between other sectors such as transportation and warehousing sector as well as science and technology sector which are of the most popular choices in this quarter. The least chosen employment sectors are charity and sport which in total give only 0. 4% of all the chart percentage.
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employment
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among Brighton University graduates are charity and sport. According to the pie
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the summarized amount of students who went into service and manufacturing industries equals
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such as transportation and warehousing
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which are of the most popular choices in this quarter. The least chosen
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employment
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are charity and sport which in total give
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