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The diagram describes the process of honey making

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The diagram describes the process of honey making. There are seven illustrations of honey production presented in the diagram. Overall, the illustrations give a brief information on how bees produce the honey. The scheme starts with the bees leaving their hive and finishes with their already produced product. After leaving the hive which is a container where bees leave, insects collect the flower nectar. Then this sweet liquid is transported back to the hive to feel it into the cells of it. after cooling down the nectar by bees wings, the final process starts. The water is contained in the nectar starts to evaporate by changing to gas. as a result of the honey is finally produced.
The diagram
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describes
the process of honey making. There are seven illustrations of honey production presented in the diagram.

Overall
, the illustrations give
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a brief information
on how bees produce the honey. The scheme
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starts
with the bees leaving their hive and finishes with their already produced product. After leaving the hive which is a container where bees
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
, insects collect the flower nectar. Then this sweet liquid
is transported
back to the hive to feel it into the cells of it. after cooling down the nectar by bees wings, the final process
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
starts
. The water
is contained
in the nectar
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starts
to evaporate by changing to gas.
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as
a result of the honey is
finally
produced.
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IELTS academic The diagram describes the process of honey making

Academic
  American English
2 paragraphs
117 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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