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The pie chart below shows the share of different auto manufacturers in the UK.

The pie chart below shows the share of different auto manufacturers in the UK. bbg66
The pie chart depicts the manufacture of different share of automobile industry in the United Kingdom. Overall, the production part for the Volkswagen group and Porsche is comparatively higher than the other automobile industry. To begin with, it can be seen that in the ending year of 2010 UK shares in the automobile industry are large in Volkswagen group and Porsche which shares up to 17. 6% from the total share. Secondly, the largest production share is occupied by the ford industry which is 13. 8%. And then the third position is inhabited by Cadilac, Chevrolet, and Vauxhall where their share is 12. 9% Moreover, the shares of Renault, Nissan, Infiniti as well as the shares of honda are nearly equal. Furthermore, BMW and Mini car industry share is 7. 5% whereas the shares of other industry are slightly lesser than this. After all, the least production share is occupied by Jaguar and Landrover industry which is 2. 6%
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