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The pie chart below shows the percentages of millionaires in the USA, by main profession.

The pie chart below shows the percentages of millionaires in the USA, by main profession. L9mOK
The pie chart illustrates the proportion of millionaires in the US by their career. Overall it’s apparent that businessmen constitute the majority of millionaires in the USA whereas politicians take up the least. It’s also worth noticing that entertainers and sportsmen also contribute a sizable proportion of wealthy Americans. First off, businessmen account for about two-thirds of US’s millionaires whereas only a small minority of politicians (4%) became millionaires. Next, the second largest group of professions for millionaires is the Entertainment, totalling almost half of the businessmen group, with 15% of TV and Film entertainers becoming wealthy. This is followed closely by the music industry, which has produced one in ten of America’s millionaires. Oppositely, sportspeople contribute to only 5% of US’s millionaires, which is five times lower than other sectors of Entertainment combined. Finally, only 2% of America’s millionaires became wealthy for other reason
The pie chart illustrates the proportion of millionaires in the US by their career.

Overall
it’s apparent that businessmen constitute the majority of millionaires in the USA whereas politicians take up the least. It’s
also
worth noticing that entertainers and sportsmen
also
contribute a sizable proportion of wealthy Americans.

First
off, businessmen account for about two-thirds of US’s millionaires whereas
only
a
small
minority of politicians (4%) became millionaires.

Next
, the second largest group of professions for millionaires is the Entertainment,
totalling
almost half of the businessmen group, with 15% of TV and Film entertainers becoming wealthy. This
is followed
closely
by the music industry, which has produced one in ten of America’s millionaires.
Oppositely
, sportspeople contribute to
only
5% of US’s millionaires, which is five times lower than other sectors of Entertainment combined.

Finally
,
only
2% of America’s millionaires became wealthy for other reason
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