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The pie chart below shows the main reasons of obesity among people. The table shows the percentage of obese people among different age groups in 3 regions in 2010.

The blend of pie chart and tabular graph illustrate the information about the percentile of people who were suffered from obesity and percentage of obese multitudes among 3 different age groups in North America, Europe and Africa in 2010. At a first glance, near about one in ten percent of inhabitants causes which were observed in genetic disorders; however, just over a quarter proportion of masses were caused by physical activity. In 2010, 35% of folks was caused obesity from eaten fast food. Less than 5% of humans was caused by stress. Moving further, in 2010, a quarter proportion of 5-15 age group people was obese in Europe, less than 8% of 16-25 age group's individuals obese in same nation. Apart from this, in Africa, 2% of 16- 25 age group folks were obese, but double fold people who were notified in 5-15 age group. In next, the obesed of 5-15 age group and 16-25 age group was 25% and 17% respectively. In 25-35 age group was 7 percent of inhabitants were observed in Europe.
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IELTS academic The pie chart below shows the main reasons of obesity among people. The table shows the percentage of obese people among different age groups in 3 regions in 2010.

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