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The pie chart below show the average household expenditures in japan and malaysia in the year 2010.

The both pie charts represent information about the proportion of household investment by Japan and malaysia in 2010. Analysing thd graphs deeply, it is vivid that in the year of 2010, the japan was using cost on other iltems and transportation was consuming almost similar. Furthermore, food had used percent of 24 in japan but it was using more than three prrcent by malaysia. In addition, japan was utilise health care 6%. Moving forward, in malaysia, health care did use three percent. Whereas, homes raised investing average of 34. Moreover, transportation was consuming ten percent. Additionally, other good and service had utilised percentage 26. Overall, it can be clearly seen that the maximum cost was used housing by malaysia and it was using other items and services. Whereas, the minimum was consuming health care by the both nations.
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IELTS academic The pie chart below show the average household expenditures in japan and malaysia in the year 2010.

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