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the pie chart below illustrates how internet users aged 16+ prefer to access internet at home and at other places

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The pie chart demonstrates the proportion of 16+ aged people who have access to the internet at home and at other places. As we can see from the chart, the maximum number of users have an access to the smartphone which accounts for one-third of the total users. A little less than one-third of the total users have a laptop. Internet users having a laptop are nearly one-fifth of the entire. Around 14 percent of internet users have a desktop computer. The information about the rest 4 percent of 16+ aged internet users is unknown. To sum up, the highest proportion of people prefer to have an access to a smartphone and desktop computer is the least popular of all the devices.
The pie chart demonstrates the proportion of 16+ aged
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who have access to the internet at home and at other places.

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from the chart, the maximum number of
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users
have
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an access
to the smartphone which accounts for one-third of the total
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users
. A
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less than one-third of the total
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users
have a laptop. Internet
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having a laptop are
nearly
one-fifth of the entire. Around 14 percent of internet
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users
have a desktop computer. The information about the rest 4 percent of 16+ aged internet
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users
is unknown.

To sum up, the highest proportion of
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people
prefer to have
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an access
to a smartphone and desktop computer is the least popular of all the devices.
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IELTS academic the pie chart below illustrates how internet users aged 16+ prefer to access internet at home and at other places

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3 paragraphs
122 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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