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The picture shows the process of making wool.

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The diagram illustrates the procedure of manufacturing wool products. Overall, the process undergoes 2 main stages, beginning with shearing and ending with spinning balls of yarn ready to make various sorts of products. The process commences with sheep fur being collected and cleaned to ensure hygiene prior to being moved to a machine to be dried. Subsequently, this material goes through a carding set with wire brushes to separate the threads into tufts of wool, waiting to be transferred to the next stage, while the excess string would be recycled for other purposes. During this stage, wool is stored for a period of time, then being spinned into balls of yarn in the last step, ready to be distributed to knitting or to other businesses to manufacture wool jackets or carpet.
The diagram illustrates the procedure of manufacturing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
wool
products.

Overall
, the process undergoes 2 main stages, beginning with shearing and ending with spinning balls of yarn ready to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
various sorts of products.

The process commences with sheep fur
being collected
and cleaned to ensure hygiene prior to being
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
moved
to a machine to
be dried
.
Subsequently
, this material goes through a carding set with wire brushes to separate the threads into tufts of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
wool
, waiting to
be transferred
to the
next
stage, while the excess string would
be recycled
for other purposes.

During this stage,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
wool
is stored
for a period of time, then
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being spinned
into balls of yarn in the last step, ready to
be distributed
to knitting or to other businesses to manufacture
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
wool
jackets or carpet.
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IELTS academic The picture shows the process of making wool.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
131 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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