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3 stage of cocoa processing

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The given flow chart illustrates how cocoa beans are processed to obtain different products. It can be clearly seen that there are three stages in the process, from the initial whole beans to the final products in the market. In the first stage, the whole beans are picked from the cocoa tree. After being picked, their outer shells are removed and they are dried for the next stage. Stage 2 consists of many steps. Firstly, the dried beans are pressed. Some of these pressed beans are further pressed to make cocoa cake, whereas the rest are refined to make industrial chocolate to which sugar is added. In the third and final stage, the cocoa cake is ground to make cocoa powder and liquor is also obtained. The cocoa powder is sent to the market to be used by the consumer, whereas the cocoa liquor is used in the industry to make cakes and drinks. The industrial chocolate is sent for final processing after which the finished chocolate products are finally consumed by consumers. Overall, there are three stages in the process of making different products from cocoa beans.
The
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given
flow chart illustrates how cocoa
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beans
are processed
to obtain
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different
products.

It can be
clearly
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seen
that there are three
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stages
in the process, from the initial whole
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beans
to

the final products in the market.

In the
first
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stage
, the whole
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beans
are picked
from the cocoa tree. After
being picked
, their

outer shells are
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removed and
they
are dried
for the
next
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stage
.
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Stage
2 consists of
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many


steps.
Firstly
, the dried
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beans
are pressed
.
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Some
of these pressed
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beans
are
further
pressed to

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make
cocoa cake, whereas the rest
are refined
to
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make
industrial chocolate to which sugar is

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added
.

In the third and final
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stage
, the cocoa cake
is ground
to
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make
cocoa powder and liquor is

also
obtained. The cocoa powder is
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sent
to the market to be
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used
by the consumer, whereas

the cocoa liquor is
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used
in the industry to
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make
cakes and drinks. The industrial chocolate is

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sent
for final processing after which the finished chocolate products are
finally
consumed by

consumers.

Overall
, there are three
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stages
in the process of making
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different
products from cocoa
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beans
.
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IELTS academic 3 stage of cocoa processing

Academic
  American English
5 paragraphs
188 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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