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The picture below shows the use of renewable energy as a percentage of total energy use from 1971 to 2011.

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The given line graph compares the percentage of energy consumption that came from renewable sources in six countries for five-year intervals from 1971 to 2011. Overall, there have been upward trends in the proportion of renewable energy use in most countries, except in Finland, the country with the highest percentage. In 1971, a quarter of Finland’s energy consumption came from renewable sources, far higher than those for any other countries. Over the following 15 years, Finland’s figure declined significantly, with some fluctuations, reaching a low of 16 percent in the late 1980s, before recovering to almost its initial level in 2011. Also mirroring the trajectory was the percentage of renewable energy use in Denmark, which actually showed an overall increase of 2 percentage points (15 to 17 percent) over the entire period, despite also dipping to 10 percent around 1986. The most remarkable change was the nine-fold growth in the percentage of renewable energy consumption in the United States, whose figures rose substantially from about 2 percent in 1971 to 18 percent after four decades, making this the country with the second highest percentage of renewable energy use among these six. Also growing were figures for France and Germany, each from under 10 percent, with the latter increasing more markedly to narrow the gap with the former, ending at nearly 15%. As for the UK, despite a similar rise of approximately 5 percent as France over 40 years, it remained the least renewable energy-dependent country on the list.
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consumption that came from
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sources in six
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for five-year intervals from 1971 to 2011.
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, except in Finland, the
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In 1971, a quarter of Finland’s
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sources, far higher than those for any other
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. Over the following 15 years, Finland’s figure declined
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fluctuations, reaching a low of 16
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in the late 1980s,
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recovering to almost its initial level in 2011.
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in Denmark, which actually
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around 1986.

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consumption in the United States, whose figures rose
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in 1971 to 18
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after four decades, making this the
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with the second highest
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among these six.
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, with the latter increasing more
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as France over 40 years, it remained the least
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on the list.
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