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How the honey bees produce honey

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The given diagram depicts that hiw honey is produced by honey bees by collecting nector juice fromthe flowersFroam an overall prespective it reveals that there are total 7 stages involved in this process. at the first stage of diagram bees leave their nest in search of collecting nector however, at the end the honey is packed into boxes and supplied into supermarketAt the first glance, it is crystal clear thatfew bees leaves their nest in search of flowers and remain at their hive to protect their nest and eggs form predators. Moving further, bees collect nector form the flowers and fill their hives cells with flower juice whereas, there is a vacant space in between cells so that air can easily pass through the cells which help to make water evaportaion through which water is evaporated from cells in the form of gas. At last, when the honey is seprated form hives the homey is purified with help of machine then pack into glasses. Nevertless, after the packaging the glass boxes sent into supermarket so that individual can use honey for their own needs
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juice
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fromthe
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it reveals that there are total 7 stages involved in this process.
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nector
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the honey
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supermarketAt
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glance, it is crystal
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thatfew
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their nest in search of flowers and remain at their hive to protect their nest and eggs
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predators. Moving
further
, bees collect
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nector
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the flowers and fill their hives
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cells
with flower juice whereas, there is a vacant space in between
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cells
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that air can
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cells
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make
water
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evaportaion
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of gas. At last, when the honey is
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seprated
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hives the homey
is purified
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help
of machine then pack into glasses.
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, after the packaging the glass boxes
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sent
into supermarket
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IELTS academic How the honey bees produce honey

Academic
  American English
1 paragraphs
183 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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